Hi Victor,
Here is my very rough blocking of him starting brushing his teeth.
I tried 2 versions because as I was doing the second version I though about him being much more contained brushing his teeth to be more coherent with his current mood. So the second version has no ending, but it will be the same last beat as the others.
This is the first version I showed you last class:
http://syncsketch.com/playground/10f90afa24884da08a07d65c044d9f53#68390
This is the second version where he starts brushing his teeth and I realized he was doing too much with his mouth. (No ending)
http://syncsketch.com/playground/4299489f230a44529fa3040d98f62e2e#68391
This is the third more contained version of him brushing his teeth.
http://syncsketch.com/playground/c58d3a6626754c03a57b67763ee9378e#68392
Please let me know if any of this work, if not to start blocking out the one where he grabs the green toothbrush and then realizes the pink one is there.
Also for the ending I cant decide if he grabs the toothbrush with his hand or not? What would you think it would be best?
Thank you
Giuliana
Hi Giuliana! I like the third version best. :)
ReplyDeleteHey Guiliana! I also like the 3rd version. However, I think you can shorten the business in the front with him brushing, and giving more time to the moment where he sees the brush and is sad. You can get some really nice thinking moments in there. Per your question on grabbing with his other hand, it may complicate the shot. As an audience, I would think from his expressions we'd know that he's thinking about this other person and is sadden by the memories the brush brings to him. I hope this helps, take it or leave it :) Good luck! Ellen
ReplyDeleteHi Giuliana, thanks for posting these. I agree with the others that #3 is the strongest. Aside from that, the shot is way too long - almost 10 seconds, and not enough time is devoted to the thinking and emotional change. You can cut off the first 100 frames or so and get right to the action. Now that I see the ideas we discussed in class I realize we need something to draw his eye (and our eye) to the pink tooth brush. One simple idea would be to have him set the tube of toothpaste on the shelf as he is brushing at the beginning of the shot. The tube bumps the cup, which causes the pink brush to shift, and this movement could draw his attention. Once he sees the toothbrush, I'd like you to spend as much time on his reactions as you did in the first version - at least 120 frames.
ReplyDeleteI hope this makes sense. Looking good, keep going!
-v
Thanks Everyone :) I'll start making those changes
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